Revised and re-posted would you comment or critique for me please, thanks?

This is SOOOOOOOOO good and so much better than emo--because the protagonist was cut------but healed-----and that's so much more refreshing than the doom and gloom I read on here most of the time! We have to have hope, without it we have little else. And I HOPE you write more----you have a lot of talent----Thanks for sharing---------------------------------…